ART WAR 4 | 2D | War of the Elements | Adriel Inunda | Serfer

[Serfer]

hahaha I think it's translucency isn't noticeable because the ocean have a similar color, but it's noticed in the tail were it pass in front of the mermaid's body. I wanted the inner part of the shark to be semitransparent to give the impression of etherealness, but as it is cleary not working I'll definitely try your suggestion, thanks!

[nesokaiyoh]

The transparency in the tail over the girl isn't directly noticeable, and especially not from a distance - it needs to read first and foremost as what it is rather than what it could be considered to be, when it's so subtle it doesn't come across too well. I myself had barely noticed the transparency in the tail actually until you'd told me. But you could also accentuate it just by having something different behind the shark. Maybe more mermaids, some rocks or corals or even some other creatures! These are just suggestions though, so take them how you will xD

[Oceane_Roh]

I haven't really feel the transparency of the shark on the first thought. Adding a bit of life in the ocean with stone corals etc would be a nice touch.
But I think what is the most strange looking, for me, in the lack of deepness in the ocean. I have this feeling of a pool/aquarium of 2.5meters maybe 3meters. She doesn't really have the space to move properly in this environment.
But for the render haven't much to say, maybe it could use a bit more light.
Keep up the good work !

[Serfer]

@nesokaiyoh, @Oceane_Roh Thank you both! I considered your comments and tried some things, I couldn't make the floor the ocean work, so I went for this version. Although, I would argue against Oceane_Roh that mermaids could come to the shallows and manage themselves there, nonetheless, with the floor the image felt a little tight.
I feel somewhat stuck now, so probably it won change as much at this point. But C&C will be very welcome anyways.

[Oceane_Roh]

Yes I do agree with you, I just felt it a little strange in this case, maybe it had to do with the dead floor but the first think that had come in my mind was an aquarium ^^'
But hell yeah it look amazing with the tweaks you've made !

[nesokaiyoh]

That already looks far better, drop offs are always terrifying imo
The bubbles and bits of ground sticking out are a nice touch too, the rendering overall is really well done.

[Serfer]

@Oceane_Roh @nesokaiyoh thanks you!

Well, as I said, not much change, but here's another update. By the way, I just realized that I can submit multiple times and the image will appear in may page, so I'll do that now.

[nesokaiyoh]

Ahh it does look super good is still salty that it would look even better with the shark in perspective still tho your shading is so appealing

[Serfer]

Thanks! I just updated it with minor changes, not sure if they are for the better at this point, but I think I'll call it done now.

[nesokaiyoh]

Grats on finishing I've really enjoyed seeing your process right from the beginning, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest too!

[Serfer]

Thank you very much! I enjoyed your process too! Best of luck for you as well!