Ahmed Yusuf
Chromalo@hotmail.com
https://chromalo.pb.gallery/works


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The design of the clothes looks amazing

that sycthe looks amazing and really cool membraine-y looking-wing-style! haha

I like where this is going!! Great work so far! :smiley:

Thanks for the love!

This design is not quite done yet. It's got a lot of issues im figuring out right now.
a list of issues i've discovered.

  1. Design is needlessly complicated.
  2. Contrast issues and unharmonios colors.
  3. Scythes and slicing motions don't fit the quick and piercing lightning element.
  4. Harpies and Witches don't go together with lightning well
  5. Draping cloth is ugly
  6. I wanna see her hair

Hey this is a really cool design !

I agree with most of your points (I don't know about the air and I love drapping sooo).
But I really love the scythe design, so if you want to change it you can turn it into a spear or a bow ? Also the way your mantle interact with the wing isn't really clear I guess ?

Anyway this is really a really cool concept and I'll be looking forward to see how it turn :smiley:

Hmm, what would Electrokinetics wear? Definetly something with metals. Leather maybe? for heat resistance and such. A sleek, slightly drapery look with metal accents.

Did another concept that i don't really like how it turned out, but i feel like i can evolve this into a more "grounded" charachter.
Ba dum tsss


I may have to restart and do thumbnails agains...

That's pretty nice, I liked the previous version better, but keep pushing get those ideas out of your head, you'll see it clearer afterwards!

I think i've got it!
....maybe.
She is a pilot for a flying exoskeleton using a railgun to shoot thunder. Thunderbird.
A few thematic problems have been solved.
-Removed witch
-Removed harpy
-Hair is visible
-Weapon is congruent with the lightning element

Your last idea work very well too.
It's nice that you don't hesitate to completely change the design if you don't feel it !

At sea.

Kate is holding a bottle of coke in her hand, leaning over the rail in the backside a yacht.
She is lost staring at the foamy ripples emerging from it.
Her purple dress flappping in the wind a little too much for her liking.

Rick walks onto deck, with a paranoid look on his face.
He walks to Kate in hasty footsteps clacking the wood floor panels.
She turns around to face him.
She observes his face.

K. concerned?

R. We're halfway through. Still nothing?

She shakes her head.

R. If it's taking them this long...i swear they must be up to something.

K. Relax, we've got you covered.

R. Covered?

He leans closer. Cold sweat running down his face.

R. You have... how many was it again?
2 MEN!
And where the fuck are they? dead already?

She pushes him away.

K. They're not dead, they're looking out for your sorry ass. Besides they don't do combat.

R. You have to be fucking with me. What the fuck are they doing then?

K. Support.

He looks around and wipes the sweat of his fucking face, trying not to burst.

R. Support?

K. Yeah....SUPPORT.

Radio hanging off Kates waistbelt beeps.

rad. Kate, come in.

K. yeah?

rad. 3 enemies approaching from 3 o'clock. Estimated speeds around 90 km/h

R. It's them?

K. Probably.

She gets off the rail and walks towards a module planted on deck with a label "Thunderbird" She opens it up revealing assebly parts, arranged for mount.
And starts taking her dress off, hesitates and looks back at Rick as he stands there watching.

K. It's gonna cost you extra if youre gonna keep standing there.

He raises his hands and goes inside.

She undresses and mounts the assembly wich starts dressing her with the EXO.

rad. Kate, come in.

K. Kate.

rad. Object below the watersurface spotted. Moving rapidly

Kate's brows tighten.
K. Torpedo?

rad. Positive. Approaching from 2.07, Z. -40m

Rick comes rushing out.
R. Torpedo???

K. Yes sir.

R. Can you stop it?

K. Negative. Torpedos travel underwater.

R. You have to get me off this boat then.

She looks him in the eye.

K. Negative.

He is stricken with shock and anger.

rad. Incoming. Enemy A breaking Range barrier in 30

K. Charlie, report enemy position on entry.

She faces Rick.

K. Now you listen to me sir, this is what we call a triple bind.
If you stay in this boat and i go to disable the torpedo, they will approach and kill you.
If i go and try fighting them off, torpedo blows this boat up with you in it.
If i try carry you and fly off they will catch up and kill us. Why? because i don't have the means to protect you from a 600 km/h flightspeed. Wich is the only way we would escape to back where we came from. And if we actually did that, do you know what's waiting for us on the beach?

R. What do we do then?

rad. Enemy entering range in 14.

Kate loads her railgun with a rod.

R. you might wanna step back from this one.

rad. entry in....
3
2
1

BOOM! Rod fired.

...

rad. enemy A down. Enemies closing in on subject, 40 kilometers. Torpedo, 35 kilometers.

R. i know. Get me off, throw me in the water, umm away from the blast.

K. It's a torpedo, the sub-surface shockwave will kill you.

Rick sways in silent panic.

rad. Ready for round 2?

K. Loaded and ready. Flight data please.

BOOM! rod fired.

...

rad. 2 enemies still approaching.

K. Fuck.

rad. inbound 15 kilometers.

R. Call down one of your friends.

K. No.

R. I'm paying you $700 000 to keep me alive. Bring down one of your friends. And he can fly me to shore while you stall them.

K. No, that's not an option. I won't risk their safety. it's in their contract. Deal with it.

R. If i don't survive, you don't get paid.

K. Then have some faith in us, or pay more.

Rick is visibly irritated, to the amusement of kate.

R. So what are we doing now?

Kate turns on her boosters.

K. Chill the fuck out, don't you know who i am?
Im the fucking Thunderbird.

The development this character is going through is pretty crazy. I did like the original design but I agree with many of your points in that it didn't really fit the lightning theme of the character. I think the mech suit kinda thing definitely does, and I think you could really play with the exaggeration in the size of those fins and boosters too. But either way it's been enjoyable thus far seeing where the character has come from and where they're ending up. Excited for more!