Critique/Paintover welcome! | Card game illustration | Carnivorous plants

[cammie555]

Hello there!

I'm currently working on this illustration for my first card game gigs (I got permission to share it from my client).

I'm kind of doubtful about the lighting and composition of this piece. I would welcome any kind of criticism as I'm also looking to add this piece to my portfolio once I am done.

This is my first time drawing a room with a lot of objects in it, so if you think something is out of place, I would be glad to hear about your opinion. This is supposed to be in a fantasy setting with minimal use of electricity, hence the weird looking lamp.

Thanks in advance!

[malcom]

Nice Start here. I like the colors in the image. One problem I noticed first was the perspective of the scene being off. I did a quick paintover/drawover with some lines as to where your Horizon line and Vanishing point could be located in the scene. Right now, some elements in the scene feel off. Mainly the pots in the foreground. With the perspective you have, you should be able to see the top of the pots. I recommend drawing some of your objects as boxes first and then forming them into the shapes you want. Doing it this way, you should have elements that follow the perspective much better.
Another thing I notice or more like feel is that the room is to small for the human character. She looks like a giant almost. Its hard to see her fitting through the door in the back. I recommend pushing the room elements back a bit. You can do this by making the back of the rooms box smaller. You can still widen it as well.
Lighting wise. The diamond things that cover portions of the windows seem a bit weird. With the way things look now, its like your implying that light that passes through the yellow areas only. If that's not the case then you should mix the sky light color from the blue in the window and the yellow covers to make a new green color that will be come your light source.
This is all the feedback I have for now. Keep up the good work.

[cammie555]

Thank you so much for the paint-over! I'll be working on those.

[cammie555]

Alright, I have changed things perspective wise about the room, and made the far end wall smaller. Some work still neds to be put into the flower pots and the size of the lady.

[malcom]

Nice improvements. Love the color change to the room.

[cammie555]

Thanks! The green on green was a bit too much in the first picture.

[cammie555]

Another update:
I put some work in the room's objects and furniture as well as the carnivorous plants. Lowered the lady and started to lay down basics for the window on the left. Some perspective work will probably have to be done on that.

Again if there is any additional criticism to be had, I would be happy to read it!

[bowzertron]

It looks like Malcom gave you all the critique needed. Colour toned down, perspective fixed and lighting. On a card this image should look really nice. The only thing I noticed is there seems to be something off about her nose, maybe its the heavy shadow on the left eye and then super bright top of the nose. What do you think? looks really nice though as is. BOWZERTRON

[cammie555]

Another update. I think that next time I post here, it may be pretty much done.
I'm kind of unsure about some colors used for what I have just added (like the red plant in the middle for example).

I also finished the windows on each side since the last update. I'm not super great at drawing anything architecture-related, so let me know if you notice something off.

After this I think the only stuff left is the light-bulb thing, the last plants + plants detailing, and the lady to re-work.

@bowzertron I agree with you! I'm planning to re-make it all, so if you have any other things you notice about her being off I would be glad to hear it

[cammie555]

Here's what I ended up with. I'm still welcoming critiques of course.

[evf]

this evolved greatly since you first posted it, nice touch on making her older
What about adding more vines etc at the bottom of the image, not too detailed, almost silhouette-ish, just to frame it slightly. plants hanging around her could be nice too.

Cheers

[cammie555]

That's a great idea! I never thought of that. I'll definitely try it out when time permits. Thanks a bunch for the input.

[anon27604699]

Much better now! Very nice indeec For what game will this illustration be?