Shepard and Garrus Crash the Mako - Critique Wanted

Stefanie_Drawinger 2017-08-22 07:51:18 UTC #1

Hey friendos!

I have another art piece that I would like to have critiqued, but this one is still in it's WIP stage so I'll be able to actually implement some changes as I create it. As the title of the thread states, I'm working on an illustration of Shepard and Garrus crashing the Mako set within the Mass Effect 1 universe.

This is a commission piece for a friend of mine. Right now I'm trying to finalize a strong overall composition of the piece, hopefully it's easy to understand in it's current stage. Thank you for lookin!!

malcom 2017-08-22 21:48:26 UTC #2

Right now they both characters seem really big scale wise in this scene. The mountains seems super close. It feels like there isn't much depth established at the moment. Guess thats a ship(correct me if i'm wrong) in the background that crashed. Right now it looks like it can be a small drone maybe. I like the concept and little story going on. The girl to me is saying, " oh well lets explore" while her companion is saying, " We gotta fix our ship or were not getting off this planet" Or "Are we gonna talk about this" I fell as if you did executed the gesture of the 2 so far but you might still be able to push it. Another thing that is kinda bugging me is the plain there on. I recommend checking the perspective grid of these 2. Overall good start. Keep up the good work. Hope this feedback helps.

cstephens4 2017-08-27 22:03:59 UTC #3

Really liking your sketching style and the characters posing!

Stefanie_Drawinger 2017-09-13 12:48:00 UTC #4

Okay, hopefully the layout is better here as opposed to my rough thumbnail. I rendered this painting in greyscale first using the greyscale/colourburn technique and I painted all the detailed rocky background of the mountainside. Thanks for looking!

Stefanie_Drawinger 2017-12-13 05:36:59 UTC #5

Here is the final image! What I've gathered from this commission greyscale experiment is that I really don't like doing greyscale rendering, especially when it came to skintones. My usual tactic is laying down base colour first, then rendering on top, I haven't done much research into greyscale rendering.

Is it worth pursuing further? What makes rendering in greyscale different from full colour rendering? I'd appreciate any info you have if you'd like to share, as well as critique on the final illustration. Thanks for lookin'!