Mar 6

Hi there!
I wanted to start a small project with a realistic goal to practice and improove, so i decided to make a 3 page long story. I already have finished sketches for the first two pages and wanted to ask for some tips.
But im not planning to change a lot anymore since i dont want to spend to much time on it. But some future tips would be really appreciated, or maybe pointing out some crucial mistakes.
Ill ad the speech bubbles digitally once im done with everything, the only panel im unhappy with rn is the last one where the sunglasses fall to the ground. Any advice or reference?
Thanks!
ps it plays in a bathroom

Mar 7

Thanks for stopping by the critique section, wow the third one in two weeks its been dead in here for months.

Quick question - do you have a style guide you are aiming for or just winging it for the sake of practice? It might also include art "gods" or "art parents" that you aspire to have similar finish towards.

I will work on a comprehensive critique covering all your concerns, please check out any of my other comprehensive critiques while you wait. Just look for the mowhawk zombie head.

(and just an fyi - when you finish and work really hard on it - and post here again it will be able to push you further than you can go at that level of finish for next time)

Mar 9

Hi there, thanks in advance!
To be honest the practice is mainly there so i can finally finish something (even if its just a small "project", im getting desperate). :dizzy_face:
I didnt really have an art parent in mind, but i guess the style that comes the closest is the one often present in early 2000´s anime (like ergo proxy and paranoia agent)

I will try to post the last page as soon as possible. Besides, i think i want to remove the action lines at the second page, i dont feel like they fit with the emotions i try to convey.
And also the panel of the hand (second page 1st picture) still looks to stiff (i wanted to portray him gripping onto the sink tightly).
Again a big thank you that you want to help!
ps i didnt quite understand what you mean with your fyi, sorry

Mar 10

Nice!

On the fyi- Oh I mean when you finish a project - and ask for critique on that - it will really push you further because your version of finished is a representation of your current skills, knowledge and execution.

And I suggest that only because - Finding stuff that is wrong from other people before moving forward while your in the middle of current project is fine if it’s like an art director - but if it’s a personal project you will know better than we probably ever will as internet randos. You seem to have a good grasp on it.

I will probably be able to post on Wednesday night or Thursday mid day. Anything you add before then I will try to incorporate. Ask for critique on the finished one as well if you want.

Mar 13

Disclaimer

Any drawings I attempt - are not - what your artworks are supposed to look like. This critique is to help you see something you may not have noticed before in an attempt to help you move forward to the next step. My critiques are based on subjective influence from my own experiences and tastes.

Overall Critique -

I think this is great. Nice intent set forward at the beginning to finish a quick project.
You will learn more, the more you finish.
So get too it.

One of the main things that I noticed was that your sketching was kind of scratchy. If it is possible, I suggest you start thinking about things in shapes, that can be drawn with large, accurate strokes. Not only will this make your projects go faster and save you time, it will make you start to think in a way that illustrators do with curved vs. straight lines in their shapes - and actually design characters with intent! That intent being shape language.

For where this is right now - overall its fine. Many if not all of these things that I have pointed out will be fixed by you while you re-draw, ink, marker, whatever your medium is.

Until you finish, we can't point out much more. You are on the right track. Just push on through. And if you want to critique the final product or just post it - your call. Treat it as the learning experience it is and move on.

In the future dont worry too much about, "I want to catch things that are wrong before I move on." mindset. The process itself of you finishing, IS THAT. That is what finishing is. Catching problems and fixing them, until there is nothing left to fix. Keep doing that to your own pieces by being your own worst critic. When you post that for critique - only then will you see where your skills are limited in their knowledge and execution by being shown what could be even better.

Keep pushing forward. This project is looking great and I think all you really need is to put some road behind you.

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Best of luck!

Mar 15

Woah, tahnk you so much! :fire:
Not only is the feedback amazing, but also a huge motivation boost, ill finish all 3 pages and post the results here.
Btw how often can i ask for feedback? Of course it would be great to get some opinions of others with each finished project, but i think im asking for to much there.

Mar 15
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Ask as much as you want, this is my hobby when I don’t have time to draw. It educates me, keeps me sharp, and can help people in the future. Just keep in mind - you can post as much as you want just dont expect people to answer and you will not get your hopes up. I can only answer when I will get to it and I now announce that I am working on a comprehensive critique so that people will come back - and sometimes I have to ask more questions so it will help with the critique.

Don’t worry about it. People come here, make an account, make a post for critique just to get people to look at it - and they never return. Even to see the critique sometimes.

They don’t ever expect this. Which makes it kind of a hilarious to imagine their reaction when they see it.

23 days later

11d

So... some time has passed and I have to come clean... :dizzy_face:
I just finished page 1 and stopped halfway through page 2. I made some pretty stupid mistakes with the liner that I had to correct digitally, which was a huge motivation killer and another reason why I should fully commit to drawing digitally. But I'm happy with how I was able to at least finish the first page, I just didn't add the dialogue because I thought it sucked too. But some thoughts on the shading would be really appreciated!

Here some things ill change next time:
-Already incooperating speech bubbles in the sketching process, so they fit better and help with the composition
-I can do the sketching on paper, but i should really do the lines and shading digitally, it has higher quality and should be easier i think

So yeah, i dont know if i will actually finish the rest of it, but for the time being im investing my time in other drawings :grimacing:

9d

I think the shading and inking is very good. It is normal to fix a couple of things in proofing before publishing.

Make a purposeful effort to pursue fun regardless of the medium you choose. It will help immensely and feel less like a chore.

I am enjoying the three tones style. (white, grey, blue with ink)

Fantastic! Go forth and create!!!

You are already being your own worst critic - which is good. Just dont be hard on yourself and cut yourself a break now and then. Keep chasing that motivation.

Ta