Armor Illustration Feedback

[normansuarno]

Hi guys, this forum really help me a lot before with one of my illustration. I hope I can get some new perspective on this one. Any critique and feedback will be helpful to help me improve this painting.

What I want to ask,
1. Is the character pose weird in this force perspective?
2. Any thing that I can do to improve the story telling?

Thank you.

[linvdmk]

You piece is very amazing! I really like it!

On the pose I can say, that the upper body looks amazing, but I can't really tell whats going on with the legs. I can tell the one on our right is kneeling, but the one on our left is not recognizable, unfortunately.
I can't really help with the storytelling tough, sorry :s

[harrycandland]

I think you need to reduce the size of the head and I'd angle it more the other direction (aligned with the bow) typically archers look over their thumb their head and bow on the same plane, the site would be on the inside of the bow rather then the outside how you have it now. maybe try using the lasso to adjust the head and see if it reads, I could be wrong. also try flipping the image and see how it reads that way. but yeah try to bump his eye up against his drawing hand and tilted the opposite direction I think

[boxofvox]

Really neat piece!

For storytelling:
An important thing to consider with forced perspective (where you are rendering a focal length), is how objects scale in focus as well as size. Here, we see that the arrow head is close and out of focus, but where is the point of focus? If it's the face, then the front hand should be a bit out of focus as well. Conversely, if it's the front hand, then the rear hand should be out of focus, as it's the opposite end of the focal length as the arrow.

Much like lighting and relative size, polishing your sense of focal length in a piece like this will provide a tremendous boost in atmospheric feeling and realism, and really drive the story in terms of what the viewer is taking note of.

[moirae]

I think all technical points have been covered, but as far as storytelling goes I can't figure anything out.

It's a guy in the middle of a desert firing an arrow.

Is he in a battle? there is no one else around. No debris or anything. There appears to be some fissures behind him but I don't know why. Otherwise it's featureless right up to the horizon. Background detail may be the next step if you're really set on telling a story. I'd probably just leave it as just a cool archer rather than cluttering everything up though.