Heres my feedback for this piece. Liking the face and pose so far. I'm personally not sure whats going on in the background, mainly the red thing. I like the 2nd version with the night sky an stars. Thats what i'm guessing your going for in that one. I think this is a great start. What I would recomend from here is to find reference. I love the angle your going for, but, you need to define some of your edges. Things look a bit to soft at the momment. The hair is something you can find reference for. What I believe you can do with the hair is changing the gesture. Try to have the hair flow within the spirial composition that you have. That's it for my feedback. Again great start. You have some nice elements but some things just need to be defined nore.
Thank you for taking the time, this was helpful 
When you pointed it out, I wanted to change the position of the braid right away, thanks.
The red thing was supposed to be a zeppelin, but I didn't like the way it eventually looked and ditched it. The idea was to have the girl standing in front of the zeppelin (with a pirate sign or something) she'd just got off, on her way to rob and pillage, but the she turned out looking too nice to be a notorious pirate :c
So here's my progress:
I actually really liked the zeppelin version, but going off your newest one: This image feels off, and it's because of the background. By looking at the lamp, and her head, we can tell that, if this was a photograph, the camera would be pointed upwards. That worked really well for the first two versions, showing off the zeppelin in the sky.
However that means that the horizon line is way too far up in your third painting, in fact, we shouldn't be seeing anything but the sky, possibly, some trees.
The challenge this time is foreign land, right? I think you should either stick with number one or two, or you could possibly change the third ones background to a cave, or perhaps an abandoned castle. That could allow for some really interesting ceiling designs.
Nice work so far, keep it up!
That's actually a very good point, thank you!
I was thinking about putting a cave entrance in the foreground too, but didn't get around doing it, I think I'll try it now.
I really like the castle ceiling idea (I actually studied Architecture), but I won't have time to do it properly before the deadline. I think I'll do it in another painting though
Thank you again, your feedback was very helpful, it's really weird how you don't see mistakes like that when you're looking at your own work no matter how much you flip it 
I'M SO BUMMED OUT YOU DIDN'T GO WITH THE ZEPPELIN I IMMEDIATELY COULD TELL WHAT IT WAS! okay, i'm going to stop screaming at you now but I really do think the zeppelin was a great idea! it reminded me of bio shock infinite! I can't go too deep into anything today unfortunately I'm always out of time. However, I shall return !
Thanks, dude Worry not, I have another idea I'm more invested in, I'll have a cooler character getting off a zeppelin soon.
P.S. I'm trying very hard not to cry because of that yelling you did ;(
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