Feb '22

Hey there, you did great on this assignement, though there are still a few nitpicks. First, in the first exercice, they all are very close, maybe try shift a tad their hue and brightness. You nailed the first picture on the second exercice, But the second one's colors are a bit faded, the sky and the suit are the most noticeable difference. For the color balance, try to crank up the red. (Also the reference picture have some weird stuff going on there). And For the last one, I struggled with this one too, so I can tell that it is close, but I don't know how to fix it. All in all, it's great ! 😃 Have a nice day! (And please don't be discouraged)

Feb '22

I won't get discharged it's all part of trial and error, So thank you very much for the critique I truly do appreciate it. and I hope to improve from. Hope you have a splendid rest of your day.

Feb '22

I'd love to live here but anyways this is my house piece thing I did a while back.

Feb '22

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Opal

Welcome! Nice work so far! I remember Marc saying for this beach adjustment its 3 changes and if you don't get it, its best to restart than to try to keep adjusting from there. Welcome to the group!

Feb '22

thanks I look forward to progressing and learning with you in art school

Feb '22

I decided I should probably do some cylinder practice critique is very appreciated.

Feb '22

I think it's clear that you made quite a bit of progress within those 3 weeks.

What I notice is, that your lines make the impression that you are quite tense. No need to hit the perfect line. I do like the imagery that was painted in one of the gesture drawing videos on Prokos Youtube: Imagine being a race car racing along the curves of the body.

I feel like you are a bit to focussed on detail here and there. You tend to draw in the muscles of the arms for example. What that tends to do is break the flow of the pose.

Another way I like to think about is: How can I make the longest possible line that still describes the pose?

Some examples:

Feb '22

thank you very much for the critique I will definitely try to be more loose with my poses and attempt to flow a little better.

Feb '22

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Opal

Fantastic work! I'm still learning gesture but I try to push the movement until it breaks, then bring it back just a small amount. Loving your work!

Feb '22

These are a combination of measure drawings over time as I have made it habit to do one a day recently.

Feb '22

They look pretty good in terms of proportions to me. What i don't like is your linework in some places, it looks a bit hesistant. Particularly for this exercise I think a bit more finish would help, there should be no ambiguity where a line is placed

Also it would be cool to add numbers to the drawings, makes it easier to track your progress (especially for us followers =)). Can't wait to see the next 7.

Feb '22

thank you for advice I'll definitely take a little more time from now on tho clean up the line work and be more certain. I also hope you have a great rest of your day

Feb '22

This was one of my recent pieces I finished for an art gallery at my school, I'm still trying to figure out color and stuff like that but overall I think it turned out okay.

Feb '22

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these are my new gesture drawings recently, I would really appreciate some critique as my poses aren't quite there for me they need something more like flow or simplicity.

Feb '22

I can see some definitive improvement over the set, so all in all you are going in a good direction.

There's a couple of things I noticed:

To add onto what I wrote onto the image: No need to draw in the peak that's produced by the ribcage protruding. In my oppinion that's a detail that's hindering the flow. Nice long lines symbolize the stretching that takes place in that area, contrasted by the pinching on the back.

Also, while blocking out the major shapes is not an error, I personally find that it makes my gestures more stiff.

That being said, gestures are a great place to experiment. Try all kinds of different approaches and find out what works for you.