FINAL | WORLDS | 2D | Encounter in the hill | Jouster

[jouster]

Hello everyone
I am painting a not totally futuristic world , in which technology has not covered all corners of the planet, the scene shows the encounter between a knight and a mech-dragon on a hill. For some reason, the desertic place where it is the demolished building has a great importance for both.
I'm sorry if I made any grammatical errors, english is not my native language.

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Concept sheet

Final Illustration :

Email: jousterdrw@protonmail.com

[jouster]

Hello again, adhered some elements and changed others (put mech dragon remains instead of the trash metal pieces).
The silhouettes with white glow is an "spirit" army, they appear when the sun lines up with the window, his comeback is to support the knight prior to his battle against the mech dragon in the sky, i put rectangular smudges on they to show them as if they were a hologram, because it fix better to the sci fi context.

[jouster]

Changed the positions of some elements, the mechanical dragon is being attacked, but he protects himself with a spherical energy shield

[thakis]

Hey jouster, very interesting idea! I have a few comments on your piece.
I really liked the first image, I think it has great lighting and contrast and it is generally much clearer. As you move to the next images, this clarity is getting lost unfortunately. All the new elements you added are somewhat distracting from the old church which I assume is your focal point. Not only that, but they are also distracting from the story you are telling. Especially in the third image, the knight has lost all the focus he had and is now part of the foreground.
The dragon is also quite hard to see. If it wasn't for its tail in the back, I don't think I could distinguish it at all.
I think you have tried to squeeze so many things in your painting that the focus on your story has been lost. My suggestion is, try to have a picture like your first one, with a clear focus on your base story (the church, the knight and the dragon). If you want to add extra secondary elements, make sure they are not stealing the focus from your main story.

Please understand that this is only my opinion and I have no intention to make you feel bad or anything like that. I think your idea is great and has a lot of potential to turn into an epic scene
Good luck and keep it up!

[jouster]

hey thakis, thanks for your advices, they did not make me feel bad at all, I am grateful to receive advices on how to improve the picture. I followed the points you indicated and maked a version removing some secondary elements to give the protagonism to the focal point and the confrontation between the dragon and the knight.

Thank you again for your time and words

[thakis]

Hey, nice changes, glad you thought my advice was useful! You can still make the composition better I think, but it's already much clearer now. I think one major issue I have is the level of contrast thourghout the whole image is almost the same, which makes it less clear. You should make sure to done some areas (less intense light/shadow) to keep the focus in specific areas in a clearer way. Cheers!

[jouster]

Thanks thakis, i trying now with less contrast on the support characters, and testing
other perspective