You're getting closer, but there's still some things that need to be corrected. Portraits are hard, and this pose is difficult as well, so don't get too discouraged, you're still doing great!
1) You brought the arm in too far. The upper arm should be angled so that a triangular gap is created between the arm bend and her eye. I also think you're making the upper arm + shoulder too short, the elbow should be a little above the eyebrow.
2) Although the chin looks a lot better, you ended up moving the jawline up too far. The ear needs to moved back and I think the neck needs to be shortened as well. I moved the collarbone to the right place as well. (It "dips in" at the center of the body.)
3) I angled the breasts out a bit further, and moved her other arm out a bit.
