Hey Josh,
I really like how this piece is turning out so far, just loving the story elements. A few points I'd like to mention, although some of it might be because it's still WIP:
His head is blending a bit too much into his armor, it's very hard to tell the shape of his head/helmet. It really needs a better read. Probably could still push the contrast of the roses a bit more as well, as they are part of the focal point and get a bit lost.
For the maid, her right hip is attracting a lot of attention as there's a lot of contrast there. I feel like toning this down a bit and increasing the constrast on her face would help.
Another thing that stands out to me but I don't really have solution for is the door. It is very small compared to the entrance. While there's foreshortening, it's also very close to the camera. What feels more important to me is that it's cutting off the feet. In action shots I feel like it's quite important to see the feet as they are a big driver of the motion and especially since the rest of the body is shown, cutting of right at the feet just looks a bit odd to me.
Also, the doorframe/entrance is massive (about 2 1/2 times her height when perspective is accounted for). Not really a problem as it doesn't really stand out.
Hope it helps a bit. Really loving it so far =).
