These are looking good! These are showing a lot more form.
For the first one I'd say try to go along more with the brow bone. The top of the structure is a little flat.
For the second set, #1 is looking good but try to make the lids curvier. Notice in the example, the second drawing the lids follow more of the lid shape. The first one sets of the structure and the second one emphasizes the shape while trying to keep the structure intact.
Also, one small thing to notice is that the top lid curves out more near the inner edge of the eye, while the lower lid curves out more near the outer edge of the eye.