Alwaysneedsleep - Art School Journey

[Gordon003]

Maybe the lower eyelid is too low? What type of expression are you trying to get?

[alwaysneedsleep]

That’s a good idea, thanks @playforwho89. I’m familiar with him via proko, haven’t seen many of his vids though.

[alwaysneedsleep]

Thanks @Gordon003, I did do a couple of quick sketches actually, but perhaps not enough, or perhaps I chose the boring one 😞. Yeah you are right I tend to play it safe with the expressions tbh, and her face is definitely lacking any sort of emotion. Thanks for the feedback.

[alwaysneedsleep]

Final page of my present to my partner. Little rushed in parts, and it definitely lacks some environment but had to cut corners to meet a deadline. I definitely held back with hatching with this page. Pretty happy with the speed lines however so that’s a plus.

Struggling with knowing when to use screen tones, specifically size wise.

[Gordon003]

Love the use of multiple long lines to show other competitors running faster than Aiko which you already mentioned.

Not too sure about screen tone but composition-wise, I recommend to not only do quick sketches but also try out different camera angles and ideas. For me, I feel it's more effective if you just show on the Aiko's eye rather than the whole face to show his sheer determination (extreme close-up shot).

I understand that you have to rushed to present your gift on time but do consider that quickly sketching and doodling random pose and camera angles can simulate your mind to go further and get unique perspective. hope that helps and your comics look very very good! congrats, man.

[alwaysneedsleep]

That’s for the feedback @Gordon003. That’s a great point about Aiko eyes, I think that would have been the right way to go tbh.

I must admit I probably don’t experiment with different perspectives when doing a panel, more with single pieces. So I probably should start doing that.

[alwaysneedsleep]

Been a little distracted this last fortnight, Zelda is pulling my focus. Was only able to do one cell in my latest panel. So here’s a sneak peek.

[alwaysneedsleep]

A little behind with posts, unfortunately Zelda is to blame.

Here is my latest piece. A gift to a work friend who got engaged. 15hr piece, I’m pretty pleased with the quality. If I had a criticism I think I played it pretty safe with the poses and camera angle. Not the most dynamic scene ever. If anyone has thoughts on what they would have done differently composition wise I’d love to hear. Cheers guys!

[patrycja.lerch]

Great piece! I like these colors and details on crown. They look like they are scheming something
Is she a doctor or this is just a normal necklace?
You have a nice focus on the ring. He looks at her and she at the ring
I would change a pillow color so ring doesn't blend in so much
I don't know about composition. it's a hard thing to do. Maybe I would give them a bit more space. Jester is very close to the border

Great work and great gift!

[alwaysneedsleep]

Thanks patrycja, always helpful. Yes she is a doctor. I think initially I wanted the pillow white to tie the 2 people together, but now that you point it out the ring definitely gets lost in it, thanks.

[alwaysneedsleep]

@patrycja.lerch, I did what you suggested, the ring pulls a little more focus now without it being washed out in white. I also desaturated the purple crown, although it was nicer before I think as you pointed out it pulls focus with that saturated purple. Thanks for the help.

[mitsuki-youko]

yooo just discovered your thread and your stuff looks super cool!! glad to see another future manga artist on here